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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Noooooooo, that ending!! Haha, I literally shouted "WHAT?!" when I read that last part with the Blood Eater. Also, can we talk about how cool the Blood Eater concept and design is, please? This was such a good read, it's clear you have put a lot of thought into this world, and it feels rich and vibrant as a result. I loved this!

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Kyra Finley's avatar

Ahhhh, thank you SOOO much, Bradley! I love the Blood Eater too… funny, he created himself while I was writing this, but he’s definitely a keeper! I’m thinking of doing a part two to wrap it up… thank you again for the feedback… it’s incredibly helpful!!

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Write, Period.'s avatar

Wonderful world you've created here! Interested to see how this develops. :)

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Kyra Finley's avatar

Ah, thank you so much! I’m so glad it feels rich and alive. I just posted part two if you’re on the edge… thank you for chiming in!

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Natasha Kealoha's avatar

Kyraaa, this is brilliant! And the Maiden, Mother, and Crone as characters! I’m hooked! 💗

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Kyra Finley's avatar

Eeeekkkk!! Mahalo sister!!! I’m writing part two right now, so your note is super encouraging… The Three created themselves in my mind, so we’ll see what they do next. I love you!

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Natasha Kealoha's avatar

Yayyy! So excited to read part 2! I love you too, sister ✨

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Tom Wentworth's avatar

Kyra! This was such a great first taste for me - I’ll definitely be looking forward to more. The scene with her mother was particularly moving, I thought, in a story packed with big emotions. Congratulations!

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Kyra Finley's avatar

Ahhh, Tom! Thank you SO much for reading and letting me know what impacted you the most! Incredibly helpful… it’s the second short story I’ve ever put out there so the feedback is amazing. I’m sitting down to write part two today! Mahalo!

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Tom Wentworth's avatar

best wishes with the next story, Kyra!

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Amanda Lōrin's avatar

LOVE THIS WORLD! I can see a whole novel series forming here sister hehe. The whole time I was asking myself what it would be like to see this forming in your mind 🤩 so here for it!!! Takes me back to the frozen lake… makes sense now the vividness 🥹 thank you thank you thank you for this dear sister, Aloha Mā 🙏🌀

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Kyra Finley's avatar

Mahalo nui loa, sister!! This means the absolute WORLD to me! And you’re onto something… I have dreams of making multiple series from this world and even the galaxy beyond this planet. 😍 Also, I kept seeing that frozen lake last night… you definitely transferred the vision! I love you completely!!!

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Amanda Lōrin's avatar

I itch in anticipation sis! 🤩🤩

And yay! So glad you saw the lake too hehe sometimes I wish we could print snapshots from our brains for the human eye to see.. but ofc we find ourselves telepathically sharing the same vision 🥹

Aroha tino nui xx

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JRR's avatar

I absolutely loved this story, and OMG the ending!!! I am placing an order for a continuation please :-). I need to know what happens next!!

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Kyra Finley's avatar

Thank you!! I'm definitely thinking about a part two... I'm not entirely sure what happens next either! 😂🩵

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